Should the high school students be sent to study abroad?
Because studying overseas can make high school students broaden their eyesights,get a new language and experience a different culture. Other that,they can also make new friends and improve their skills.
As a result,high school students should be sent to study abroad.
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Your thesis statement should be no more than two sentences. I think it is good but needs to be more concise to fit it into two sentences instead of three.
ReplyDeleteAlso I think where it says 'get a new language' should be change to 'learn a new language'.
Other than that it is good because you making a claim and showing the direction your essay is going.
En, you and me have the same problem---too many sentences.
ReplyDeleteYou pointed out what the advantages are for students to study abroad.
What's more, you made a clear answer about your topic---it's easy for me to find out what your opinion is.
Follow your classmates' advice - it is good advice!
ReplyDeletenowdays,in order to improve skills and experiences,high school students should be sent to study abroad.
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