Should people undergo plastic surgery?
In recent years, people in all ages prefer to pay more attention on their appearances, so they undergo plastic surgery to make their faces or bodies perfect. However, the disadvantages of plastic surgery, which included the risks of it, wasting a huge amount of money, ignoring their own unique personality and bad influences for children, are much more than the advantages.
The statement shows clearly what the author want ague with. And the words which support the author's side are very good and enough.
ReplyDeleteIt's a good thesis statement which includs the explaination of the topic and good reason supporting.The only problem I think is a little bit long as a thesis statement.
ReplyDeleteYour thesis statement is good.If you make it shorter,it will be better.
ReplyDeleteTianTian, This looks like a very good start. You need to make the second sentence more concise (shorter) - can you use shorter phrases so it is easier to read and understand?
ReplyDeleteIn recent years, people in all ages prefer to pay more attention on their appearances, so they undergo plastic surgery to make their faces or bodies perfect. However, the disadvantages of plastic surgery are exist, such as risks, wasting money, ignoring unique personality and bad influences for children.
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