Tuesday, October 13, 2009

Thesis Statement

Being a leader or a common member?

When it comes to the choice between the leader and a common member, different people have different preferences due to their distinct backgrounds and experiences. Here, three qualities that a leader should have which is definitely not everyone can reach it, at least not me. Great pressure and heavy responsibility come together as the first qualification; and next one should be a visionary person; Eloquent and resourceful are another skill that an outstanding leader should have.

5 comments:

  1. We made the same mistake which is we told too much information we need to write in thesis statement.

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  2. Very interesting and well-organized.but you'd better shorten it and clearify your main idea.

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  3. T & Shunya are right - your statement needs to be more concise and not as wordy. Also, your topic is again a problem because this is not an argument. This would be a good thesis statement for an informative essay but not a persuasive one.

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  4. Revised:

    People always struggle withthe problem should trust their first impression of a person or not? Absolutely not! To judge a person need more time as well as facts, plus the first impressions are usually undependable.

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